Carmen
Almost out of the sky, half of the moon
It makes a cross of mourning between my eyes
Oh to follow the road that leads away from everything
Your breast is enough for my heart
I have said that you sang in the wind
You gather things to you like an old road
I have gone marking the atlas of your body
Stories to tell you on the shore of evening
I who live in a harbor between the lips and the voice
Occasionally
My own fine self
About Me
- Frank Parker
- Tucson, Arizona, United States
15 comments:
"It makes a cross of mourning between my eyes"
is my favourite line.
Beautiful imagery too.
Thank you, gautami. This poem is a construction of lines from and homage to Pablo Neruda. An experiment fueled by passions at the time.
- Frank
This is truly lovely! Thank you for sharing.
Thank you, R.G.!
- Frank
Wow! You shouldn't wait to board the train - let this be your 1st Monday Poetry Train offering.
Loved this:
"You gather things to you like an old road
I have gone marking the atlas of your body
Stories to tell you on the shore of evening"
Fantastic.
"Stories to tell you on the shore of evening"
This paints the clearest picture for me. Thanks for sharing this.
Nice meeting you on Rhian's train, btw.
Wow, what a neat way to put a poem together, and this is quite lovely, Frank.
I have gone marking the atlas of your body - very, very nice.
Hi Frank: I'm a new visitor to your blog and I'll definitely be back. Am dropping by through Rhi's Poetry Train. Mine's up too.
Thanks, Christine. You'll note from my earlier responses that this poem is a construction made from lines by Pablo Neruda. The one you comment upon is likely his most quoted.
- Frank
Well damn Frank - that's pretty freaking awesome! the continuity of thought flows beautifully - quite the artful collaging of words. Welcome aboard the train!
Great poem, I like the line "Stories to tell you on the shore of evening." Welcome to the poetry train.
Thank you, Ann!
- Frank
Yay Frank! I'm glad you joined us. I knew your lovely lines and re-constructions would find fans here.
Danika
Very sensual. I especially love the last stanza.
Could you be Irish?
Hi, Colleen,
Irish on my maternal grandmother's side. I'm also a mix of German and English. Thank you for the welcome.
- Frank
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